chuck the chicken

Here is my recount. I would like some feedback about my efforts, thanks.

WOW Monday was a great day we played chuck the chicken with Nathan and Katie. we played in the hall.Then the group sitting paced the cow around then Nathan said chuck the chicken the person who had. I liked having  fun and I want to do it again.The game was awesome. I would like to play the game again.I enjoyed the game.

I walked through a forest to a log cabin.

I sprinted through a long forest it was a fine day.I saw a small cute cuddly kiwi then i saw a hole in a rock i thought  

We were going home from school when we found a path. We sprinted through a long forest. It was a fine day. We found a small cute cuddly kiwi, then we saw a hole in a rock. We thought that it was a normal rock… But before we knew, a bear crept out of the bush and it went for us. Then before we knew, a lion took out the bear with a tiger. I saw a lot of black and red eyes. I smelt a whisper of smoke. The smoke lead me to a log cabin.

“The End” by Tyrese  

In the Trenches

Sandbags exploding because of the gunshots when they went through the tatterdemalion sandbags. I wonder if the Army got shot through the sandbags?

Dirty water in tea because they did not have any clean water. Did the Army survive the dirty water?

Mud everywhere because of the terrible weather. I wonder if the Army survived the terrible weather?

Parasites crawling up soldiers bodies because they don’t have any home. I wonder where they would be going next?